omgsh mikey

Very funny. I didn't see any grammatical errors, and even if I did, I forgot them. And I liked your commercial on youtube. The voices were funny.

Ah! Wonderful. You had me hooked on the first sentence. I didn't find any mistakes, by the way. Oh! I loved how the main character called the girls dunce #1 ...

I didn't really know how to describe how she laughed. It was one of those "hmmph" kind of laughs, but I don't like to use that in stories. Does that ...

I have one question though...you said she's sixteen, and her mother is thirteen? Step-mom or something? You might want to say that. She said thirtieth, not thirteen. =D Anyway, I ...

Mm, very good. The only things I was suggest would be to definitely space out your paragraphs (it makes it so much easier to read) and there were some grammatical ...

Ah. Dang it. I've still got a ways to go...

I'm not sure if anyone has asked this, but how do you put a headline above your writer status? I've been trying to figure it out since I joined, but ...

I haven't posted much on here, so I thought I'd do some catching up. This is a story that I just started a few days ago, but the characters were ...

Very interesting. You kept me hooked on it beginning to end. If I critiqued this, I'd be echoing the other two who posted before me, so I've got really nothing ...

HIM. Is an amazing band, just thought I'd say that =D. Eeeh. Not really. I don't like their sound much. But we're both entitled to our opinions. =D Everyday, I ...

That was really good. I'd critique it, but I'm not very good, and I didn't see anything wrong with it anyway. So good job!

This is really interesting. I hope you'll update soon. :)

Thanks a lot. I wasn't so confident about this chapter, because it went a lot faster than I wanted it too.

Oh! Okay.

He stared at me. "What the hell are you talking about?" I pulled my hands from his grasp and closed my eyes. "I don't want to talk about it, Pat. ...